Visit to a magnificent place, 50% discount

A poem about someone’s visit to a magnificent place:
Poetic Asides – Visitor’s Poem and Being Poetry – Describe a magnificent place, then count the words and reduce them by 50%

[Notes: 1. It is a Sijo. 2. The second variant is reduced by 50%]

Below the azure sky rises a blinding rocky peak,
Breath-taking with its whiteness, sublimely crushing my high pride.
I never stop coming to watch and imbibe its grandeur. 

Below azure sky – rocky peak
breath-taking, whiteness, crushing pride
I stop, watch – grandeur. 

© 2012 Mariya Koleva

Author: soul mary

Writer, poet and reader

4 thoughts on “Visit to a magnificent place, 50% discount”

  1. That’s not easy to do, Mariya. Well done. Reminds me of the father in “A River Runs Through It” who kept telling his son, cut it in half.
    Both poems are beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

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