Transition – OSI

OSI#213 Transition – Alouette

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Transition best fits
Those willing to quit
Who move away from the dark.
It suddenly starts
As they fall apart
Blazing with beautiful spark. 

Transition itself
Stays hardly on shelf
It often makes for the stars.
Those people remain
In fire and pain
Yet never live behind bars.

© 2012 Mariya Koleva

20 replies on “Transition – OSI”

  1. The pain of enduring is easier than defining what makes this so artistic; a rare commodity you’ve shared generously.

  2. PremI says:

    A new dimension of Transition.
    Nicely expressed.

  3. PremI – thanks a lot!

  4. marilyn says:

    “Blazing with beautiful spark”… I like that image

  5. Some excellent imagery in this. And quite a message.

  6. Geraldine says:

    Yes, a lot of imagery in your words. Interesting.

  7. good rhythm in this poem 🙂

    peace,
    deborah

  8. Deborah – thanks a lot! This form – the Alouette, is very cute. Unfortunately, I usually do poor job poeming to forms, as I put too much efforts in the form instead of the content 😀

  9. totomai says:

    loved the contrasts on each stanza here.

    the rhymes are added bonus too

  10. Misky says:

    A very nice rhythm, and the words are very wise.

  11. Jim says:

    I like your Alouette, Mariya. I had to look it up so I’d know it’s form. Good job here! 🙂
    You are right too, there aren’t many stars behind bars though I dare say if we were doing what they did they would through away the keys on us.
    ..

  12. Jorc says:

    In fire and pain…very vivid! Great read.
    I haven’t wrapped my head around this prompt yet, but maybe later today.

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